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Name of document<\/h4>\n

‘Income tables’ [webpage]<\/p>\n

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Original sentence: 28 words<\/h4>\n

For customised statistics or suggestions of cross-tabulations that you require but were not able to produce from these particular tables, you may wish to request some customised data.<\/p>\n

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Rewritten sentence: 16 words<\/h4>\n

If you don’t find what you need in these tables, contact our Customised Data Services team.
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Judges’ comment<\/h4>\n

The rewrite beautifully captures the original, gives instructions with sharp accuracy and a link to assistance, and uses a friendly tone.<\/p>\n

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Media statement<\/h4>\n

I’m honoured to be named as a winner in this year’s WriteMark Plain English Awards. Statistics\u00a0New\u00a0Zealand’s goal is to provide New\u00a0Zealand with the information it needs.<\/p>\n

Our Customised Data Services team provide an excellent service and I didn’t want a bad sentence getting in the way of that. The sentence was published before our Plain English Standard came along \u2014 it wouldn’t make it onto our website these days.<\/p>\n

It’s great to get recognition of this transformation from such talented plain English practitioners. Statistics\u00a0NZ is committed to making our information available to people, in the way they want it. Making it clearly understandable is very important.<\/p>\n

Lesley Hanes
\n<\/strong>User experience consultant\u00a0<\/strong><\/p>\n","protected":false},"excerpt":{"rendered":"

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