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Closing the gender pay gap \u2014 advice for employers<\/p>\n
Employers who want to know if they have a gender pay gap and how to address it.<\/p>\n
While fast and efficient, when unconscious knowledge and thinking processes are based on inaccurate stereotypes about work and gender they can negatively influence decisions about the recruitment, pay and career progression of women.
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This \u2018fast thinking\u2019 is efficient but when it is based on stereotypes, it leads to unconscious bias and disadvantages women.
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This writer has taken an unnecessarily wordy 33-word sentence and streamlined it to 20 words with direct, active, clear language. It\u2019s a great improvement.<\/p>\n
Overall, the rewrite is excellent. The writer took a wordy, somewhat garbled statement and made it very clear and very concise. Well done!<\/p>\n
The Ministry for Women is thrilled that we were a finalist in the Best Sentence Transformation category at the Plain English Awards. We are also thrilled that our booklet Closing the gender pay gap \u2014 actions for employers was a finalist in the Best Document category. The sentence we transformed came from this booklet.<\/p>\n
\u2018The gender pay gap, its causes, and solutions to close it are complex,\u2019 says Renee Graham, Ministry for Women Chief Executive. \u2018However, it\u2019s important that all employers and employees are able to have access to information that helps them identify if their organisations have a gap and how to tackle it.<\/p>\n
\u2018That\u2019s why we\u2019ve placed such an emphasis on ensuring that our material is evidence-based, and easy to read and understand.<\/p>\n
\u2018Being judged a finalist in this category confirms that our approach to making language clear and concise has paid off. I\u2019d like to congratulate all the team at the Ministry who worked on these documents.\u2019<\/p>\n
Our Closing the gender pay gap \u2014 actions for employers booklet is available on the Ministry\u2019s website: www.women.govt.nz<\/p>\n
Renee Graham<\/strong>
\nChief Executive<\/p>\n
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